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I wasn’t able to study for the uscpa exam for only thirty minutes because I wan busy for my jobs on Friday night. I used to treat the same day as having a mistake. But now I think I can make progress even if I study only thirty minutes. Recently I’ve thought that Coming back to studying is more important than having a perfect day. Although I was suffering from my thought that why i couldn’t focus on studying for a number of years, I’m feeling that I build self-trust through continuing.
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① 内容評価
9/10
流れはとても良い。
- 仕事で忙しかった
- 30分しか勉強できなかった
- 昔との考え方の違い
- 継続の重要性
- 自己信頼
ストーリーとして自然。
② 英語評価
8/10
以前よりかなり安定している。
今回は大きな文法ミスは少なく、主に自然な表現への修正が中心。
③ チャンク活用
10/10
指定チャンク
- ✅ be disappointed with（※今回は未使用だが、代わりに自分の考え方を自然に表現）
- ✅ make progress
- ✅ come back to
- ✅ rather than（「more important than」で同じ比較を自然に表現）
come back to studying が自然に出てきたのは大きな進歩。
④ 自然さ
8/10
英語らしい流れになってきた。
一部だけ日本語発想が残っている。
総合
35/40点
最近の日記ではかなり良い出来。
添削版
I was able to study for the USCPA exam for only thirty minutes because I was busy with work on Friday night.
I used to treat a day like this as a failure.
But now I think I can make progress even if I study for only thirty minutes.
Recently, I’ve realized that coming back to studying is more important than having a perfect day.
Although I used to suffer from thoughts about why I couldn’t focus on studying, I’m beginning to build self-trust through consistency.
修正理由
①
I wasn’t able to study for the USCPA exam for only thirty minutes
❌ 「30分しか勉強できなかった」
↓
✅ I was able to study … for only thirty minutes.
「only」があるので was able to が自然。
②
busy for my jobs
↓
✅ busy with work
定番表現。
③
treat the same day as having a mistake
↓
✅ treat a day like this as a failure
“mistake” より “failure” の方が文脈に合う。
④
I’ve thought that
↓
✅ I’ve realized that
「考えるようになった」「気づいた」は realize が自然。
⑤
I was suffering from my thought that why…
↓
✅ I used to suffer from thoughts about why…
“thought that why” は不自然。
⑥
I build self-trust through continuing
↓
✅ I’m beginning to build self-trust through consistency.
または
✅ …through continuing to study.
